Writing Workshop II (Samples from Essay I)
WWII Handout
PR II
Assignment:
Final Draft of Essay II due (with all the required components)
- Final Draft (on top)
- Edited Rough Draft
- PRII document
- Signed Outline
- Signed Invention II assignment
- Rubric
1180 Essay I Samples for WWII
- We spent the whole summer together going fishing, camping, and going to concerts.
- When I was five years old I remember crying a whole lot, never sitting still, and my speech and learning was impaired.
- I once remember someone telling me that they were not close with their grandparents.
- Just a casual summer day with nothing planned, the boredom was killing me.
- Initially I thought that we would be going to the small airport down the road but I was wrong, we were taking off from the small field behind the building.
- Looking around, there was so many people wearing blue and silver, but as for me, I was not wearing Lion’s colors and made me feel like I stood out a lot.
- My mom would leave me home at the age of six to care for my brothers and sister I learned to feed and change them at a very young age.
- Seeing my grandma lying in bed with a breathing mask on her face, wrist in restraints to keep from taking the mask off.
- I swam anxiously towards to two twins thinking there was an actually emergency.
- We slowly drove off, shaken from what just happened and the realization that we just got robbed by the police.
- But this also made him very upset, he threw harsh names at me, calling me lazy, that I needed to lose weight, him knowing that this hurt me he still signed me up to play.
- It all happened so fast, I forget that I was even participating in the race.
- Years ago while rummaging through a drawer of papers. A blue paper with red trim caught my eye.
Find a sentence in your narrative essay (preferably one that I did not fix) that is improperly punctuated (comma splice, incorrect semi-colon use, run on/fused sentence, missing comma in dependent/independent or compound construction, fragment, etc.) Write this sentence here (as it originally appears in your essay):
In the best possible way, revise this sentence, and rewrite it here:
Provide your rationale for the revision/explain the rule. Refer to your handbook if necessary.
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